on the floor
moves like a floating pollen
PS:My first attempt of writing a Haiku.Please drop your opinion about it.
Inspired by the theme PRIDE at
Posted by Vidya on February 3, 2013 in Uncategorized
February 5, 2013 at 6:34 pm
I like it and it paints a strong image.
February 6, 2013 at 5:13 pm
Thanks a lot 🙂 I’m glad you liked it
February 6, 2013 at 8:30 pm
Beautiful haiku and imagery… Only tip is since you’re using the 3-5-3 syllables haiku approach, the middle line on your post has too many syllables. 🙂
February 8, 2013 at 12:58 am
I’ll double check the syllables from next time(Little weak to figure them out).Just posted what came into my mind.Thanks a lot for your valuable suggestion 🙂
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